A few points on style of the video- I think we were supposed to stand and give our pitch but I understand how crazy things can be while traveling. Great pitch overall. I think you have a really good idea and I would love to see someone run with your pitch and as you say " catch up" on our standards of transportation.
Out of town working on the travel system? lol I have to offer a little constructive criticism, I think you spent too much time on the background of the problem, and too little on the solution. Maybe try and condense the history and open with the problems it causes? I feel like that would grab attention more. I would personally love to hear more about your plan for interconnecting the railway system, I'm tired of driving 5 hours back home to South Florida!
I really like this idea, I have been keeping up with your blog to see what can come of it. Although, for your elevator pitch I would've liked to hear possibly the problems right off the bat and then introduce a little of the background. I really like your ideas !! Next time, imagine that you are presenting this for a future boss I think that is more of what was asked for. But overall, love this topic! Good job
Hey Archie,
ReplyDeleteA few points on style of the video- I think we were supposed to stand and give our pitch but I understand how crazy things can be while traveling. Great pitch overall. I think you have a really good idea and I would love to see someone run with your pitch and as you say " catch up" on our standards of transportation.
Out of town working on the travel system? lol
ReplyDeleteI have to offer a little constructive criticism, I think you spent too much time on the background of the problem, and too little on the solution. Maybe try and condense the history and open with the problems it causes? I feel like that would grab attention more. I would personally love to hear more about your plan for interconnecting the railway system, I'm tired of driving 5 hours back home to South Florida!
I really like this idea, I have been keeping up with your blog to see what can come of it. Although, for your elevator pitch I would've liked to hear possibly the problems right off the bat and then introduce a little of the background. I really like your ideas !! Next time, imagine that you are presenting this for a future boss I think that is more of what was asked for. But overall, love this topic! Good job
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